I enjoyed your ending best of all and your use of percussion.
=) one, two...
Is this two step?
is this in a blues style? lots of dominant chords etc?
Can you send me the sheet if you have it? I'd love to loook at it.
some parts feel kinda choppy tho. like uhh. too much staccato haha. sorry i dont know any technical way of explaining
like around 2:30
criticism. you asked for it.
more bass, tho disregard if you intend to have only high/med parts. (which i dont like, fyi, not that you need to listen to me)
your percussion is terrible. its a loop most of the time. and just on the beats. be creative. percussion is its own voice, give it interesting non simple beat stuff.
add some layered background maybe, the sound is clear throughout, theres space to get more complex.
reuse material. try layering one melody or chord part over another.
bring in some standout solo parts.
add some frills and trills to your piano part. and usually pianos are played with more than one note at a time.
at 2:17 instead of repeating, break to higher notes or lower notes, get expansive with that jumpy melody.
very catchy and soothing.
i like the title and premise.
may i suggest trying to get a "deep" sound? a bit more ethereal? more floaty?
beginnings sound somehow a bit "dull" in sound. (not dull as in boring)
dizi is a chinese flute haha (you probably know but yeah). try adding more grace notes and stuff to that line, most dizi are very flexible instruments. and go higher.
until of course youre trying to stay true to the game music xactly
yeah they are pretty cool and i love the way they sound too!
My one piece of advice is that you think too much about melody and chord (bassline) and the sound but you lack on complexity. Your percussion part is repetitive and plays beats. It also uses only standard equipment. Try something new, like vibraphone or chimes or timpani.
Your harmody is also pretty simple pitchwise. I hear a lot of single repeating notes. (starting at 1:00). This type of repetition is not good, it is wasted creative space.
You also have a few too many places where different instruments playing in unison to each other. (i enjoy 2:00+ a lot). Add voices that play different things. It just seems very melody and harmony only and sounds simplistic that way.
On the other hand, I can tell you did a lot of work and its not actually all that simple. (I compose also). Your mix of sounds is good and your extra additions to the melodies are great, but you simply spent too much energy worrying about sound and not to complexity.
Just the kind of review i was looking for! Very helpful!!! Glad u liked it though and look fwd to more pointers from you. Ill continue working on this track and repost no telling when though. lol Again thanks my friend!
your climax at 3:50
add giant bass notes in your bassline brass. in fifths or fourths or octaves, adds dimension and epicness.
nice guitar part. I could use with a bit more of it thru the song.
at the beginning feel free to add some more stuff to it, its a very boring beginning if i may say. ex, you could use that flute-y instrument i hear later.
Damn see I forgot to do that when I was making the song... i KNEW i forgot something when I uploaded this... well thanks for the review! The reviews on this song are awesome cuzz there's criticism, but it's constructive.
very very unique
i like your violin? solo at 4:10, sounds extremely exotic, kinda of gypsy like = im assuming it is a referrence to the phantom's childhood.
the bass, being played by the lower brass, could use a bit more omph, and variation. for instance, making the the 2nd beat longer and the third shorter. or accents. and try arpeggios instead of the same notes.
making the bass a much more unique and involved part really makes a big difference.
what are you using to record/create this?
YOU GET A NINE!! YES A NINE.
please please please please, add the "left panned bass" at least some of the time to this rest of the song. for example, at 0:25. or if you want to go nuts, give the bass a unique new part and you'll be god.
please please please. =P
PS. its pretty good now, but its just MISSING that bass you used in the beginning. but i like what youve done a lot already. with the back and forth of the two leading synths counterpoint. the back and forth of the left and right sound movement is cool
I might remake this song in the future, thanks for the idea.
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